black
By Nita
BlackThere are two of meLook deep in side and you’all seeThere’s black…it’s the evil in me-It fights to get outIt screams and shoutsI close my eyes and look withinThere is a battle insideThe black is evil it makes me sin-The black is unconquerableIT ALWAYS WINS!!!The white is weak-it shan’t speakIt shall not fight ,it goes to sleepwillingly accepting defeatSo the black I see, isn’t the real meFor I’m locked in a shellCondemned to a black hellI no longer want to fightI no longer want to be whiteThe black has conquered meFor me there is no turningBack….Hello all,i thank you for comments...i am to a professional writer or anything, just a girl expressing my thoughts. Can you comment on the following areas:1) My writing style2) Structure3)Does it get the readers attention?4) Does it make you think of anything in particular...death, ? Written May 18th, 2001 © on Sep 22 2001 03:10 PM PST 18 • 0 • 1
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"BlackThere are two of meLook deep in side and you’all seeThere’s black…it’s the evil in me-It fights to get outIt screams and shoutsI close my eyes and look withinThere is a battle insideThe black is evil it makes me sin-The black is unconquerableIT ALWAYS WINS!!!The white is weak-it shan’t speakIt shall not fight ,it goes to sleepwillingly accepting defeatSo the black I see, isn’t the real meFor I’m locked in a shellCondemned to a black hellI no longer want to fightI no longer want to be whiteThe black has conquered meFor me there is no turningBack….Hello all,i thank you for comments...i am to a professional writer or anything, just a girl expressing my thoughts. Can you comment on the following areas:1) My writing style2) Structure3)Does it get the readers attention?4) Does it make you think of anything in particular...death, ?..."