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i am sweet surrender to the god who smiles i am a war raging inside you so don't come near i am like a crystal mirror beauty here i am a pistol shooting forth from chaos in a can i am the silent martyr i am eye he does not know how to love it doesn't matter he is close i know i mustn't fight but you chose they tell me i'm perfect perfect lies i need i need to be wrecked down a holy snort they do not know me but they hate me why why i can see i will cling til he has struck me off loves me still strikes me did i ever see doves not at home i bring now with a fist look at my mirror til you vanish they hook me each speck of dust does one kind word so wanted it's all i need need i know hospitals are lonely nurses give such weary worried looks my pain so much a weapon right hooks white basin my sal vation manipulation of my cal loused mind liquid now i wonder how steel feels against the temple i feel home again please hold me then i know that everything i was a small child when pat on my head turns slap to face what get down on my knees to stay atop you can frown but i won the d.a.r.e. contest would my hand let me pull into control i stand will be ok so long as you stay here with me is a kid supposed to think tears juxtapose love hate the pedestal it's far too high fly high and i'll forget fits fits of feeling cloud it up it would be worth death if they could see i cry for youI just wrote this and all of my ideal readers have been having trouble with it. It is six different people's voices juxtaposed in the same order in each stanza, but I don't know if it's too stranded. Help! One person has suggested pulling a William Faulkner and bolding one voice and italicizing the next, but I don't want it to look like just 2 voices either. Please give me advice. Thank you all! Written February 18th, 2002 © on Feb 20 2002 06:24 AM PST   10 • 0 • 1