' Raindrops '
By sparky
RAINDROPSRaindrops falling on meLittle beads of moistureForming all sorts of mysteriesWhilst I think of herDark Grey clouds above to seeThe clouds took on a gray hazeParts of each wispy formation wereDarker with their load of moisture.They moved with silent dignity as minutes pass slowly byYet the glowing sunlight lives behind these curtains of air.Pouring its heart out with meDo they know that I’m lonely without my love?Rain streaming down like the tears in my heart.Each time she leaves my sidethe emptiness in this soul does startPitter, patter, drip and runSinging in the rain, or cozy fire light to dream bySkipping puddles together, reliving our youthful fantasiesNever wondering if or when the rain will cease to beRaindrops, like the tears of joy to meMy love shall come and bring sunshine again.Full critique.... good/bad....ways to improve this ' free verse' style Written November 29th, 2001 © on Nov 30 2001 12:40 AM PST 0 • 10
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"RAINDROPSRaindrops falling on meLittle beads of moistureForming all sorts of mysteriesWhilst I think of herDark Grey clouds above to seeThe clouds took on a gray hazeParts of each wispy formation wereDarker with their load of moisture.They moved with silent dignity as minutes pass slowly byYet the glowing sunlight lives behind these curtains of air.Pouring its heart out with meDo they know that I’m lonely without my love?Rain streaming down like the tears in my heart.Each time she leaves my sidethe emptiness in this soul does startPitter, patter, drip and runSinging in the rain, or cozy fire light to dream bySkipping puddles together, reliving our youthful fantasiesNever wondering if or when the rain will cease to beRaindrops, like the tears of joy to meMy love shall come and bring sunshine again.Full critique.... good/bad....ways to improve this ' free verse' style..."